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"It has to be this way... it has to..."

The studious unicorn known as Twilight Sparkle was within the library which she called home, rummaging around through a series of books.  A few of these books were on history, such as ancient ponies who had influenced Equestria in its early days.  The ones closer to her though, those that one would for the most part be unable to see, had to deal with various aspects of pony health.  Her current tome to scrutinize was one called Equine Emotions: Psychological Studies on the Mind, skimming through each of the pages.  Just for research.  Never knew when it could come in handy.

She had hoped they would come in handy.  The reference guide hadn't told her much else.  Would she get hints here?  Something that would show her what she wanted?  So far nothing to explicitly state outright, but it was giving her hints, ideas.  What to do for her plan.

No pony's even ever tried, have they?  They never would, but I'll need to, the pony thought.  Need to, need to.

The unicorn looked around in the silence, the only sound to be heard being the movements of her own hooves.  Her assistant Spike had gone off to Sugarcube Corner - probably devouring cupcakes by now if Pinkie Pie hadn't already done so herself.

Silence, silence was good.  Libraries weren't usually for loud noises.

Humming, Twilight Sparkle levitated the various books onto their shelves, before going to the placement of a certain tome on the end of the shelf: the reference guide to the Elements of Harmony.

Oh, those mysterious Elements.  Where had they come from?  Did Celestia and Luna create them?  What was it that had caused the Elements to change hooves?  And why?  Why?  

Was there some sort of process within, a magical process that created just the right conditions for the Elements' qualities to appear in the pony they were connected to?  And if so, why did they split?  Celestia had used them all to banish Nightmare Moon into the moon, so was there some qualities that one pony could have and others not?

Questions, questions, questions with gaps where the answers would be.  But Twilight Sparkle was going to do her best to find those answers.  No matter what the cost was.  It would be best for generations.  If the others died without the elements' essences being discovered, then how would it be known who to go to after they were gone?  If friendship, the ponies' survival mechanism that could be turned into a physical form, was gone forever?

The Elements preserved that.  And it was clear that the Elements didn't change hooves when the previous holder died - Celestia and Luna were still around, after all.  It had to be some sort of quality, not a spiritual aspect that transferred to a pony after death.  Celestia had been able to wield all six, after all.

Preserve the essence of the Elements; preserve her friends.  Yes, yes, it had to be that way.  The clock was ticking.  Ticking ticking ticking and it wasn't going to stop.

Running her left front hoof over the cover of the book as it was placed back onto the shelf, she went over to the bookshelf's side and pressed against a spot on the wall with her hoof.  A small panel, near invisible, could be seen with the pressure on it.

With that, the bookcase and the wall behind it began to move.  Rotating like a revolving doorway, where the solid wall had once been was now a cavernous hole, which Twilight stepped through, summoning a torch before the structure fell back into place.

Aside from the torch and the light from her horn, the unicorn was shrouded in complete darkness.  But it didn't matter.  She knew exactly where to go.  

Making a left turn about 15 feet away from the entrance through which she had come, a spiral of stone steps could be seen swirling down into the depths of the earth.  The purple unicorn hummed a little tune to keep herself company as she descended, farther down than the room where she had tested Pinkie Pie's "Pinkie Sense."

Perhaps she'd get to try that again.  But that matter would be for a later decision. 

Eventually, the spiral reached its conclusion and the pony's hooves connected with the flat cold ground.  It must have been quite down deep, this hidden-away space.  Just a dark, dank cellar, long forgotten.

Twilight, however, had... improved on it.

The hallway wasn't quite as wide as that of the cavern above, but a portion of this area went from being stone to metallic, with doors made of steel.  One, far back and tucked away, was what the unicorn now came to.  Punching in a number code next to the door, it opened, the unicorn's humming ceasing upon entering the large room.

It was a room that one would expect to find in a science laboratory - or rather, a twisted scientist who had a thing for horror films and murder.  Sleek, silver machines whirled into life, all of various sizes and functions.  One appeared to be a scanner of sorts, another looked like a large egg beater with a scalpel, hanging over a table with four cuffs.  

But the horror part came with the smell and some of the room's features.  Upon several of these surfaces were blood, most dried and caked on from disuse of the equipment, though there was what appeared to be small monitoring mechanisms overlooking them, picking up the DNA signatures and analyzing the bacteria about the place, for here even decay was monitored, examined, and kept for analysis.  Suspended atop pedestals were bright white models of pony skeletons - or were they real, skeletal structures of ponies who had perished?  They were certainly sterilized quite well, visible under the plastic that covered them and showing no signs of decay, not even a small amount of bone marrow visible. What could be smelled that wasn't entrails was alcohol used to keep everything fresh.

In this way too, there were entrails within a myriad of jars for cleansing, several organs hanging from suspended wires around the room's far left wall.  These too, were sterilized, kept in bags to keep dust out and rubbed in a liquid.

It wasn't just the images and the smell of rot and death that accompanied this room's horrors.  There were sounds, an audible disturbance of the silence here.  Where there had once been a lack of noise was the faint beeping of monitors, the churning of machinery.  There was also a more curious noise, one that sounded like the light breathing of another life form.  Another pony.  A faint mumbling as if somepony was just groggily talking in their sleep.  As if they were trying to wake up but not quite awake yet.

Twilight, however, remained unperturbed by the noise, getting rid of the torch and acting as if everything was normal.  She knocked on the walls, grinning in satisfaction and letting a laugh escape her as no sound came from the paneling when she knocked her hooves against it.  Just silence, as if the hoof had never impacted its surface.

"Perfect!" she exclaimed.  "I see the soundproof walls are still holding up!"

The unicorn went over to a dusty, steel-shelved bookcase where a special selection of books were kept.  Books that would definitely not be found in the upper areas of Ponyville's library which anypony could access on a whim.  Books that dealt with the darker effects of psychological torment, workings of the brain, drugs that could dull pain or increase it.  Substances that could immobilize a pony; keep them awake, alive.   One book was particularly think, though this one wasn't a textbook - it was a book full of notes and diagrams that Twilight had jotted down through her array of studies.

But she was looking for one book in particular, and it didn't take her long to find it.  Unlike the others, this book had no pages.  In fact, it was just a cover for the moment.  Not for long, though.  That all would soon change.

Using her magic, she removed the thin book, only the outline of its future design sketched upon its surface - a familiar-looking design, one that many ponies would recognize, a cyan-colored cover adorned with a red, blue, and yellow lightning bolt coming out of a cloud on both the front and back sides.

Twilight smiled, hoof tracing over the cover as she laughed, an unsettling little giggle that had only come from her mouth before during the friendship letter incident.  Only when she was planning something.  Something big, something desperate, something unhinged were other ponies able to see her.  

She slowly turned the gaze of her dilated pupils over toward the muffled noise at last, as if just realizing the voice was there.  After levitating the book into its proper place and trotting over toward the machinery to get some pieces of equipment warmed up, she came over to the right side of the room.  To a cold metal table where a pony was strapped tightly.  Watching the subject slowly open her eyes.  Her drugged, sleepy, confused, rose-colored eyes.   

"Time to wake up, Rainbow Dash."
TV Tropes page: tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php…
Fanfic trailer someone did: www.youtube.com/watch?v=iIw8Qm…
Fanfic reading by gibbiegibs: www.youtube.com/watch?v=yWzw-h…

Chapter List (Extraction Arc):
Chapter 1: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 2: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 3: WarriorSparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 4, Part 1: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 4, Part 2: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 5: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 6, Part 1: WarriorSparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 6, Part 2: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 7, Part 1: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 7, Part 2: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 8, Part 1: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 8, Part 2: WarriorSparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 9, Part 1: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 9, Part 2: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter. 10, Part 1: warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Chapter 10, Part 2:warriorsparrow.deviantart.com/…
Epilogue and the next fic in the series is coming soon.


Yeah, I decided to try my hand at a grimdark horror fic, so I figured I'd post it here (though it's also on FiMfiction.net - my name there is Shadowed Rainbow) and on fanfiction.net, with my username there being PotterPhantomKitten. This first chapter isn't real bad compared to others, being mainly setting description. However, I will say this...

WARNING: Especially starting with Chapter 2, this is grimdark on a very severe level, and the author of The Experiments of Twilight Sparkle has directly said that this is a more disturbing story than his. Reader discretion is VERY strongly advised.

Also comments are appreciated. Ultimate goals:
A. Finish writing the fic (Wow, how ironic that that's the last thing on the goal list to be accomplished)
B. Get eventual reading of fic on YouTube (MISSION ACCOMPLISHED!:
by gibbiegibs: www.youtube.com/watch?v=yWzw-h…
C. Get TV Tropes page for the fic (MISSION ACCOMPLISHED!: tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php…

Someone in a comment did mention it would be a cool to have a comic book adaption of this, and while I do agree that would be awesome, the fic is extremely long and it would take a LOT of time - the Cupcakes comic is already over 40 pages and it's not done yet, and that story is relatively short. However, if anypony happens to really want to do a comic adaption, I won't object. :)

MLP: FiM belongs to Lauren Faust and Hasbro.

NOTE: Take a look at the comic "A Broken Pinkie Pie" fav.me/d52lvne It's written by the same guy who wrote The Experiments of Twilight Sparkle.
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013
Wait, which Cupcakes comic?
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
Uh, quick question: when in the timeline does this take place? I'm not familiar with the show, so a brief summary of the time placement would be very much appreciated.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
Though I started it before Season 2 finished, in terms of timeline divergance I'd say takes place about the middle of Season 3.
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
Cool.

But what exactly triggers the time split? As in, what major event, if the outcome was altered, would cause these events to occur?

Sorry if this follow-up question bothers you, but I feel it's a question that needs to be asked.

Of course, if answering this question counts as a spoiler in your opinion, feel free to say so.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Oh, I see what you're saying, as in, what caused Twilight to have this desire anyway?

It'll be learned... ;)
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Well, considering the fact that it's a fanfic and almost every fanfic is in some way a slight alternate continuity (shipping the Mane 6 or the Princesses, heavy gore, having everypony secretly be changelings, etc.), I was going to chalk that up to simple fanfic purposes, though Twilight does have a specific reason as to why and how she started doing this in the first place. 

However... considering the size and scope of Twilight's big plan... I think I might actually somehow figure out into it... if I can fit it in... which considering Twilight's future plan it very well could...
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Nice to know, although I would have accepted 'it's a spoiler', but still, nice to know.

Thanks, ma'am.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Ah, technically I just gave you a longer version of "it's a spoiler", as you're still pretty much in the dark besides "reasons will come eventually and it's not entirely a Ron the Death Eater trope kind of thing".
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
Holy cow, man; I would LOVE to see a comic book adaption to this! I don't know if you're a good drawer or not, but if you are, DO IT! If not, GET SOMEONE TO DO IT!
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
Believe me, I would love to see a comic adaption to this as well, but I'm not exactly the best at drawing, as the stuff I do is primarily vector edits/combos and the like. :p  You're going to have to ask someone else... but if you succeed in finding someone, let me know! ;)
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
... How about Pinkanon? Maybe when he/she is done with 'Cupcakes', he/she could try adapting 'Pages of Harmony'.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Well, Cupcakes is a pretty short fanfic and the comic is over 40 pages long so far... adapting Pages of Harmony into comic form would take forever for her to do... can't hurt to ask for at least part of it though if you want, I guess, I'd love to see a comic either way. ;)
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
...Oy. Complications, complications...

Well, maybe we can find some other equal-quality artists willing to make the comic and have them collaborate, maybe? Y'know, with each one doing a different chapter?

I dunno, I'm just drawing a blank here...
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
True, we could do that, we'd need to get a lot who would be willing to do so, though, and it would probably be a bit vain for me to request it to multiple people.
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LordXamweth Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Gah, we can't ask one person to do the comic as it would take forever, and we can't ask multiple people to do it because it seems vain.

(sighs) Guess the comic idea's gone down the drain. Shame; I really wanted to see it become a reality...
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Hey, I'm not saying we couldn't ask multiple people to do it, I was saying I specifically don't feel like I could do it because it would seem vain (nothing stopping you or other fans of the fic requesting it though :))

Maybe you and/or me and/or some other people could ask someone to somehow do part of the comic?  I too want to see a comic version of it in some form.
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Chocolatier12 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013
Oh dear God...just...why?

Why are grimdark fics becoming so popular?

Do people enjoy this stuff? Cold blood torture of PONIES for pity's sake?
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013
I think that a fair amount of people enjoy just because it completely subverts expectations... or they just like grimdark morbid stuff - everyone has their own reason for liking things. :)
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Chocolatier12 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013
What's your reason?
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
I'd say it's both for me - mainly that I have an odd fascination with grimdark and macabre stuff. :mwahaha:
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Chocolatier12 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
But...ponies?
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
I like ponies - plus, there's all kinds of potential natural and magical dangers around, and Twilight has mental instability issues as it is. Plus, that world has a lot of places and such that we don't know about.
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Chocolatier12 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
Makes sense, I suppose, but...I don't know, it just doesn't seem like it's respecting the characters. You and I both know that Twilight would never harm her friends, at least not intentionally.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
That is, unless something happened.... Twilight's friends turned into their opposites when Discord brainwashed them, Luna turned into Nightmare Moon when she let jealousy consume her, Trixie became a power-hungry tyrant when she wore the Alicorn Amulet... when you think about it, any number of things can happen...
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sokom64 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Still haven't reach to an end the story, i thought than by now it may have ended, anyway this is even better for me, im retaking the story line at chapter 8, i have no clue to whats goin on so far.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Well, reason it hasn't ended yet:

1. School-related delays
2. Occasional writer's block
3. Wanting to take my time with details
4. Sometimes a lack of motivation to write anything (or just feeling lazy)
5. Coming up with more story arcs and thus ways to wrap everything up nicely, because I realized that my up-until-recently planned 15-or-so chapters would have felt too rushed and tacked on and the ending I had in mind wouldn't have been as loose-end-tying.

I'd like to hear your retake of the story at chapter 8 though. :)
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AutumnDance123 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   General Artist
Are there any cupcakes-like fanfics out there you know except instead of Twilight being the culprit it's Rainbow Dash? AND THIS IS REALLY GOOD SO FAR, but I'm a bit scared to read more because the imagery I got from The Experiments of Twilight Sparkle was intense, then I saw in your description that this is more disturbing... :iconshiverplz:
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
If you mean grimdark fanfics in general where Rainbow Dash is doing the killing or being the villain in general, then I can think of one notable one - Rainbow Factory. It's based off of the WoodenToaster song of the same name (which I absolutely love) and is probably one of my favorite fanfics ever. Definitely my favorite grimdark, at any rare: when you read chapter 2, you'll get a pretty big shout out it it.... :)

And yeah, if you were very disturbed by the imagery of TEOTS, then i HEAVILY warn you to read at your own risk. The author of the fic itself even said that POH is more disturbing than his fic, and that in comparison my story is much better written. :omg: (he's working on revising it, though to try to improve his writing) And on top of that, mine isn't even over yet...:omg:

If you feel really uncomfortable reading it, you can go to the TV Tropes page on it to find out some stuff about it, but I do warn you that you'll still likely be disturbed.

Oh, and a fun little fact: a majority of the torture methods used exist in real life.
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AutumnDance123 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   General Artist
I've heard of Rainbow Factory everywhere but I have yet to give it a chance. Now hearing from you it was a great fanfic, I'm gonna have to read it now!

Oh... My. Okay then, I shall definitely keep in mind that POH is even more disturbing than that. I'm very use to disturbing imagery and gore/violence but reading TEOTS was giving me heavy imagery of Twilight with read eyes, impossibly wide smiles and... the other mane five...

I'll also keep the TV Tropes thing in mind as well, just in case.

I know they exist in real life, and it makes me wonder the levels and gory violence and insanity people can reach sometimes...
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Yes, definitelygive Rainbow Factory a read! :D

Yeah, if TEOTS gave you those kind of heavy images... well, POH has those minus the red eyes - more like crazy-pinprick eyes and glowing white in Harmony!Twilight's (for lack of a better name) case. But yeah as for the content POH does have, disturbingly wide smiles? Check. Bad stuff happening to the other Mane 5? Check? Scalping, scientific procedures, electric torture, memory alteration, cannibalism, getting an eye or two burned out, and constant odd debates with a living conscience? Check, check, check, CHECK. (and I didn't even describe all the rest of the stuff). Not to mention the fic still has quite a bit to go - I have a warning label on this thing for a reason. O__o :evillaugh:

Yeah, TV Tropes serves as a kind of "know what you're getting into" thing. :)

And I agree, people do seem to reach high levels of insanity sometimes...
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AutumnDance123 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   General Artist
I've already started reading!

Oh geez... Twilight seems creepy already! This is encouraging me to read, but scaring me into not reading it too. Eh, I'm gonna do it anyway. I noticed it wasn't done yet, and it has up to ten chapters and some parts. I can tell why you put a label... O___o

I see :)

Yeah, I've seen many cases on TV that seems pretty extreme and insane. I am REALLY worrying about how America, or the entire world, will turn out in the future...
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Hope you like it! :D

If you do read it, hope you don't get nightmares!;) Or, if you do, I apologize in advance... tell me what you think of the other chapters if you do read on, though! :D

I think that the world will get better eventually, it just takes time. :)
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AutumnDance123 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   General Artist
No need to apologize, I know you wouldn't had intended for it XD And I will! :D

Yeah, I really hope so, cause I don't want my kids growing up in an evil environment.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
And hopefully I'll finish the next chapter before you're completely done reading the next 8 chapters! :) And in case you didn't see my journal, this is gonna have a whole other story arc added on!:D (Not as a tacked on thing, mind you, it's basically gonna expand on a somewhat-rushed-as-I-now-realize original ending thing for it, and explains a few things that had been alluded to but I would have completely forgotten to address had I gone with my original plan. :)

*hugs* Things may seem kind of bad in some places now at times, but I have a feeling (and a strong hope) that things will get better in time.
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Anonymous-Cantaloupe Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
omgz need more! this is SO GOOD.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
Thanks! :)
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Anonymous-Cantaloupe Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome!
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NFSXMLP Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Off to a great start my friend
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Thanks! :)
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NFSXMLP Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
no probs its what i do
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Hl2fan29 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
i freaking love this, im happy its on DA now
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
Oh, did you first see in on fanfiction.net or Fimfiction?
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Hl2fan29 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
found it on fimfiction after searching for good grimdark stories
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
Cool! :)
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IKingFisher Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
All this talk of Fluttershy crisis has brought this story to my attention and you'll be glad to know I'm now going through it, good job on all the writing...you really seem to enjoy killing Ponies
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
Glad you like it... and as for me liking killing the ponies,, to paraphrase the creator of the Luna Games... "I kill them off because I love them". Like a friend of mine once said - the more they hurt, the more we love.
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IKingFisher Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012
It's funny, I never realized how many MLP grimdarks there were. It makes sense though, it goes back to what I said about perversion of the shows themes, a show about love and friendship makes the most interesting and effective to flip using violence.
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WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012
Exactly - it's like there's a certain interest to corrupting something...
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IKingFisher Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012
It's why Mortal Kombat has always had "friendships" as secret Fatalities that are harder to pull off and yet lack any sort of violence...to see a brutal Kombatant pull out flowers instead of the enemie's spine is irresistible.
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